Discovery Draft Essay #3

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This is my first draft. More will be added, and I will have to fix up my citations.

2 Responses to “Discovery Draft Essay #3”

  1. king1296 Says:

    Notes for Peer’s Oral Response

    Essay # 3

    Writer Kingsley Osuji Peer Respondent Nicholas King

    Instructions: Listen to the essay carefully. Take at least two minutes after the reading to complete the following notes, and then share your reactions orally with the writer. Submit the completed form to your teacher at the end of the Peer Response activity.

    (+) What works? (praise)

    Good detail and explains what is involved with producing
    Good use of examples and first hand experience

    (-) What Doesn’t (polish)

    Some details are not needed and overly used
    The works cited is not in MLA format

    (?) Questions?

    Why did you choose to write about a program?
    Are you going into a profession that involves this?

  2. abbeyrd224 Says:

    Notes for Peer’s Oral Response

    Essay # _____

    Writer Kingsley_____ Peer Respondent __Felicia Mohamed______

    Instructions: Listen to the essay carefully. Take at least two minutes after the reading to complete the following notes, and then share your reactions orally with the writer. Submit the completed form to your teacher at the end of the Peer Response activity.

    (+) What works? (praise)

    Good piece in total. Interesting topic. It was a good idea to include some history and comparisons on your topic because the review alone would be difficult for the reader to understand.

    (-) What Doesn’t (polish)

    I think you need to expand more on your topic. I don’t think it met the criteria of being a critical review. What more do you know about your topic? What interesting fact can you add?

    (?) Questions?

    Why is this interesting to you?

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